Giving feedback to get feedback - here's how to do it (and why)!

I agree and will do my best to encourage others... As myself, I am still struggling with my writtings.

Thank you, Jason!
Your faithful advise makes me feel easy and challenging!
I'll do my best more!!
Have a good weekend with your lovely family!^^ Jason.

Well.....I think I understood what you trying to say..
But you are missing something....

that I'm not capable of those things yet..

May be I should try lol.

please give me feed back about my essay.
Agree or disagree That distance learning and online computer classes should replace class room learning.

Where ever we turn our gaze we will see the chnges.changing is the nature of the world. Man through the ages undergoes to the changes. Some time these changes are worse but most of the time it wills helpfull.We can see the changes in our education system also. If we look in the past the only way we found to get education was to go to college or school. But in now days as the new technologies are interning in the world these technologies make the world computerized and electronic. This advancement affects our education system also. The invention of the computer and internet made the education system more advance and mordoinize, .Now in our country we can see two types of education first one is direct learning and other one is indirect learning. In direct learning student goes to school and college and interact with the teachers face to face. It is true that face to face interaction leaves a deep impact on teachers and student both. In class room learning student not only meet with the teachers but also come in touch with the verity of student which is also helpful in getting knowledge. Through this way student can share there views and adopt the others students view. On the other hand indirect learning that is distance learning and online classes are the mordent way of getting education. Some times what happen that some people are not able to go to college and attained the classes because of some circumstance chances in these situation distance learning and online classed help them to complete their education and fulfill their dream of better carrier. for example here I want to illustrate the story one of my friend he was very intelligent and has a good academic status but in the middle of the graduation his father died and he was next earning member of his family after his father in this situation it was not possible for him to go to college and complete their education in this situation with the help of the online classes he was to complete his graduation with his job. Some times people want to get high education but it is not possible for ever human being to go to another country and complete his wish but through the indirect education facility student can easily get education from other countries also. Some people feel hesitations to go to college because of their age at this situation they can complete his qualification through online classes. In my opinion both the way of education have their own places and importance. One can not replace another. The multimedia format of education should supplement the real class room learning can not replace it. It could be a effective solution to get education to everyone.

Explain what you think are the main reasons people in your country have for learning English. Support your ideas with details and examples.

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In Arabic countries specially my country (Kingdom of Saudi Arabia), people are of their language. The pride increases when they read about their lost honor. When the Islamic civilization was destination for all the people asking for sciences and knowledge. Nowadays, people have woken up and have discovered the demand of English language. This is noted in the increasing of the institutes
which teach the English language in the last twenty years. But, the teaching methods are not good enough.

People in my country, show markable concern for English because it is the mother language of the sciences. Most recent fields after the secondary school teach in English. for example, medical, engineering, sciences and others fields are taught in English. Some Arabic countries did a great effort in translate all the knowledges to Arabic, like Syria, but they failed to follow the rapid development. Other countries have introduced the English language as a subject in the intermediate schools, like Saudi Arabia, but the results were not good. While other countries establish the English language from the primary schools beside the native language, what gives a perfect results, like Egypt. One of the most difficult challenges is the methods of teaching English. The absent of qualified teachers, ignoring the usage of the native teachers and lack to the modern laps are delaying the teaching process. The revolution in the communications help the self-learning. People can learn English from internet such as this wonderful website.

Nowadays, the English language has become a second language i the most of the Arabic countries, and the concern for improving the teaching methods encourage people to learn English.

please give me feed back about my essay.
Agree or disagree That distance learning and online computer classes should replace class room learning.

Where ever we turn our gaze we will see the chnges.changing is the nature of the world. Man through the ages undergoes to the changes. Some time these changes are worse but most of the time it wills helpfull.We can see the changes in our education system also. If we look in the past the only way we found to get education was to go to college or school. But in now days as (the) new technologies are interning in the world "THEY"(these technologies) make the world computerized and electronic. This advancement affects our education system "TOO" (also). The invention of the computer and internet made the education system more advance and "MODERNIZED"(mordoinize), .Now in our country we can see two types of education first one is direct learning and other one is indirect learning. In direct learning student goes to school and college and interact(s) with the teachers face to face. It is true that face to face interaction leaves a deep impact on teachers and student(s) both. In class room learning student not only meet(s) with the teachers but also come(s) in touch with the verity of student(s) which is also helpful in getting knowledge. Through this way student can share there views and adopt(s) the others students view. On the other hand, indirect learning that is distance learning and online classes are the mordent way of getting education. Some times what happen that some people are not able to go to college and attained the classes because of some circumstance chances in these situation distance learning and online classed help them to complete their education and fulfill their dream of better carrier. for example here I want to illustrate the story one of my friend he was very intelligent and has a good academic status but in the middle of the graduation his father died and he was next earning member of his family after his father in this situation it was not possible for him to go to college and complete their education in this situation with the help of the online classes he was to complete his graduation with his job. Some times people want to get high education but it is not possible for ever human being to go to another country and complete his wish but through the indirect education facility student can easily get education from other countries also. Some people feel hesitations to go to college because of their age at this situation they can complete his qualification through online classes. In my opinion both the way of education have their own places and importance. One can not replace another. The multimedia format of education should supplement the real class room learning can not replace it. It could be a effective solution to get education to everyone.

-sonali

please give me feed back about my essay.

Explain what you think are the main reasons people in your country have for learning English. Support your ideas with details and examples.

In Arabic countries specially my country (Kingdom of Saudi Arabia), people are of their language. The pride increases when they read about their lost honor. When the Islamic civilization was destination for all the people asking for sciences and knowledge. Nowadays, people have woken up and have discovered the demand of English language. This is noted in the increasing of the institutes
which teach the English language in the last twenty years. But, the teaching methods are not good enough.

People in my country, show markable concern for English because it is the mother language of the sciences. Most recent fields after the secondary school teach in English. for example, medical, engineering, sciences and others fields are taught in English. Some Arabic countries did a great effort in translate all the knowledges to Arabic, like Syria, but they failed to follow the rapid development. Other countries have introduced the English language as a subject in the intermediate schools, like Saudi Arabia, but the results were not good. While other countries establish the English language from the primary schools beside the native language, what gives a perfect results, like Egypt. One of the most difficult challenges is the methods of teaching English. The absent of qualified teachers, ignoring the usage of the native teachers and lack to the modern laps are delaying the teaching process. The revolution in the communications help the self-learning. People can learn English from internet such as this wonderful website.

Nowadays, the English language has become a second language i the most of the Arabic countries, and the concern for improving the teaching methods encourage people to learn English.

Hi e-student.
I will do my best if you accept my suggestions. Remember that I am learning like you.
I think that you have to read the tips that Jason wrote in this website. It will help you organize your writing and your thoughts.
First of all, a essay has to have 3 parts: introduction, body and conclusion.
The introductory paragraph has to have your thesis very clear. It also needs to state which will be your reasons that then you will develop in the body. For example, you can say that the reasons why people in your country learn English are.....( give at least 2 reasons). Then your body will have 2 paragraphs. One with a topic sentence about the reason #1 and the second paragraph with the topic sentence #2. Of course, then you have to give examples and details related with the topic that you are developing to support it.
I noticed that your essay lacks of this structure and sometimes I got confused not getting connection with the topic sentence ( you finished the paragraph talking about the teaching system). I think that you can make 2 paragraphs. The first one could talk about the importance of English in science fields and the other paragraph talking about another reason why your people is learning English.
After that you conclude the essay re-stating the 2 reasons a little different.

Be careful with the structure of the following sentence: "When the Islamic civilization was destination for all the people asking for sciences and knowledge." Something is missing... for example you can say " When the Islamic civilization was destination for all the people asking for sciences and knowledge, they were able to give answers.

I hope this help you.
Buenosaires.

At the beginning, I didn't know how important it is but now I guess I do know about this a little bit more. Actually, the comments that other people made for me was greatly helpful. I could know where I did mistake and what was well done. I appreciate them very much. I guess I'd better keep replying and it would be helpful me but also others.

At the first writing class, I didn't know why we should give feedbacks one another. I thought teacher's feedback is more important to improve student’s English ability because I thought student can get information related to grammar, vocabulary, and writing skills from only instructor. However, I changed my thought while I attend your writing class. As I read other students' essay, I was aware of importance of reading essays and giving feedbacks to others. I knew proper usage of vocabulary and grammar through reading other good essays. Also I felt need for improving my poor English ability. I think giving feedbacks to t others was good experiences to improve my English ability. ^.^ I will keep in mind this.

Mr. Renshaw, I have something to confess (?) hahaha.
At the beginning I had the exactly same thinking with others; I didn't understand why you made us give feedbacks to others' ones. In addition, it seemed to be very annoying and stressful.
However someday I found out that I, myself was obsorbed in following your instruct with enjoyment and delight. Frankly at first, I made some feedback just to fill the number of the posts. However while doing that, I became realizing that my writing skills and using of appropriate words were gradually improving. Also as time went by, I started to enjoy it purely and it became interesting. Moreover from it, I had some opportunities to retrospect my own knowledge and background information with understanding how to make some comments.
Therefore I really appreciate that your policy to make students read more writings of others and to give a chance to become a considerate and thoughtful critic. Thanks :D

As I replied to the feedbacks the other students have me, I felt the importance of feedback. When I become an English teacher in the future, I will use this way to encourage the students to do it. It will be very helpful. Thank you. :-)