I assume that most people prefer to have some close friends rather than numerous casual acquaintences. However, in terms that everyone can be friends, I do not support the argument.
First of all, the closer friends they are, the more cautious they have to be. Some people might think that we need close friends because only close friends would run to us when we were in risks. However, no matter how intimate they are, it is not desirable to depend on friends at all time. For example, let's assume that there were a very close friend, but who required you for money all the time. No one could accept this kind of friend. Therefore, in order not to break up the friendship, it is important to be more considerate with close friends.
Secondly, the friendship is always changeable. Some friendships might be able to last for a long period, even until we die. However, as our lives are not as stable as we wish, it is almost impossible to keep the same attitude to the friends all the time. From my own experience, the close friends, now, are different from those who I used to have when I was in twenties because we could not have seen each other for a long time. The friendsip are usually based on the time to spend together.
Finally, everyone can be friends when opening mind. As this modern society has developed so fast, there are numerous chances to meet new people. However, many people believe that it is not worthy of trusting people right away who just met. This is, I assume, the reason why the vibe of this society becomes cold and indifferent. Most of all, because people are always too afraid of other strangers, they would not be able to have chances to get to know each other.
In conclusion, although it must be beautiful to have good friends who could be with us until we die, whenever we open our minds, there must be numerous friends in this world. For these reasons, I am skeptical about the opinion that close friends are always better than any other acquaintences.
Beyond doubt, some people prefer to have a large number of casual acquaintances. There are myriad reasons behind this belief. Having a lot of people around you, may give you the feeling of popularity, may cause you to sense that you are socially skillful. Personally, I think that one close friend is way better than tens of superficial relationships. I acquired this point of view through my humble experience.
One of the most crucial characteristics I like a person, whom I deal with, is to be reliable. Every day we meet many people, at school, at work, or at the gym. But at most, one or two of them we can develop a personal connection with. By a way of example, one week after I started my new job, I had to take unscheduled day off, but the manager said that we are so busy, and I have to find someone to fill in for me. I asked four of my coworkers to do that for me, but all of them turned me down. Then Sarah approached me and offered to cover for me, that was the beginning of long-lasting friendship between both of us. We always have been there for each other.
Although knowing a lot of people may have some advantages like building a network of connections that would help in social life. It a fact, when It comes to our private life, we look for a true friend whom we can trust to share with him/her our secrets. I remember once, I had s\a financial problems and I did not want my family to know about It. I felt that I am alone in this earth, then my friend Sam called me and we talked about the problem. He was so compassionate and he lent me some money to solve that issue.
In general, the more people you know the more trouble you get into. What I meant with that. When you associate with a large number of fellows, for sure, you will be exposed to gossip. For instance, one day at work, some stranger came to me and start talking to me aggressively and threatening me because he heard that I was trying to steal his girlfriend from him. But in fact, at first I did not even know the girl he was talking about, then I recalled her name she was the mail girl who I had seem her just once.
All in All, in considering the number and quality of friends I prefer to have, I have explored the issues of dependability; faith; and the fewer friends you have the less problem you avoid. These factors may not be persuasive to all people, but they lead me personally to believe that having one or two close friends is better for me than having a huge number of casual acquaintances.
-samsam294
Score = 3.5
Some of the supporting examples seem a little opportunistic (as in potentially "made up" for the purposes of your argument), and you need to pay attention to your clause structures (you have a lot of "hanging" clauses here) and punctuation.
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I assume that most people prefer to have some close friends rather than numerous casual acquaintences. However, in terms that everyone can be friends, I do not support the argument.
First of all, the closer friends they are, the more cautious they have to be. Some people might think that we need close friends because only close friends would run to us when we were in risks. However, no matter how intimate they are, it is not desirable to depend on friends at all time. For example, let's assume that there were a very close friend, but who required you for money all the time. No one could accept this kind of friend. Therefore, in order not to break up the friendship, it is important to be more considerate with close friends.
Secondly, the friendship is always changeable. Some friendships might be able to last for a long period, even until we die. However, as our lives are not as stable as we wish, it is almost impossible to keep the same attitude to the friends all the time. From my own experience, the close friends, now, are different from those who I used to have when I was in twenties because we could not have seen each other for a long time. The friendsip are usually based on the time to spend together.
Finally, everyone can be friends when opening mind. As this modern society has developed so fast, there are numerous chances to meet new people. However, many people believe that it is not worthy of trusting people right away who just met. This is, I assume, the reason why the vibe of this society becomes cold and indifferent. Most of all, because people are always too afraid of other strangers, they would not be able to have chances to get to know each other.
In conclusion, although it must be beautiful to have good friends who could be with us until we die, whenever we open our minds, there must be numerous friends in this world. For these reasons, I am skeptical about the opinion that close friends are always better than any other acquaintences.-soulin
Score = 4.0
The writing is generally very good, but your focus is too much on why close friends aren't good rather than positively demonstrating the value of many acquaintances. Your writing is showing massive improvement, however - especially in terms of vocabulary, written expression, organization and development!
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Personally, i agree with the above statement that, It is better to have one or two close friends than large number of acquaintances.In my view a friend is a reliable and trustworthy person.Even having one such person is enough rather than having many without reliability.
To start with,"Friend in need is a friend indeed". This explains true friendship which blossoms without any expectation and during the hour of need it is there to help. In my own experience, i have been deserted by my friends in the hour of need.I was engaged in a textile business, it was my growing period so i trusted many people, even some posed as true friends gained much financial concession by getting orders for their near and dear ones.I gave finished goods in less profit for them and in turn they sold in market with high price margin. During recession when my goods where stranded the same people did not come forward to help me financially, so that i can withstand for some time in market. We should be always beware of people who pose as friends to take advantage of our position.
In addition, Many acquaintances causes trouble rather than help us. when we are away to party or working out in clubs many causally interact with us. we end up exchanging our mobile number and our official position.This ends up in messing our image in the society, those who obtains this misuses it to get favor from others or in the Govt setup. Consider a example of a CEO, who during a party meets a person and ends up sharing him his mobile number and position, this can be used by the stranger for his financial benefit or some favor.
Finally, we should identify true friendship, those alone will be truthful and can be trusted.I always advocate be friendly but it should be with One who we know very well and he really appreciate and value our presence.In my life i have only one trusted friend, ours is a childhood friendship, both where from same locality. even though we both did our graduation in different field and work in contrasting setup, still we have cordial and trustful relationship.
To sum up,true friendship blossoms without any expectation and those alone will be truthful and can be trusted. Even it is one, worth a million.
Personally, i agree with the above statement that, It is better to have one or two close friends than large number of acquaintances.In my view a friend is a reliable and trustworthy person.Even having one such person is enough rather than having many without reliability.
To start with,"Friend in need is a friend indeed". This explains true friendship which blossoms without any expectation and during the hour of need it is there to help. In my own experience, i have been deserted by my friends in the hour of need.I was engaged in a textile business, it was my growing period so i trusted many people, even some posed as true friends gained much financial concession by getting orders for their near and dear ones.I gave finished goods in less profit for them and in turn they sold in market with high price margin. During recession when my goods where stranded the same people did not come forward to help me financially, so that i can withstand for some time in market. We should be always beware of people who pose as friends to take advantage of our position.
In addition, Many acquaintances causes trouble rather than help us. when we are away to party or working out in clubs many causally interact with us. we end up exchanging our mobile number and our official position.This ends up in messing our image in the society, those who obtains this misuses it to get favor from others or in the Govt setup. Consider a example of a CEO, who during a party meets a person and ends up sharing him his mobile number and position, this can be used by the stranger for his financial benefit or some favor.
Finally, we should identify true friendship, those alone will be truthful and can be trusted.I always advocate be friendly but it should be with One who we know very well and he really appreciate and value our presence.In my life i have only one trusted friend, ours is a childhood friendship, both where from same locality. even though we both did our graduation in different field and work in contrasting setup, still we have cordial and trustful relationship.
To sum up,true friendship blossoms without any expectation and those alone will be truthful and can be trusted. Even it is one, worth a million.-jpperanandha
Score = 3.0
Arguments sometimes only vaguely connected to topic, and you have to pay some major attention to punctuation.
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Thanks!
Imagine you have lots of friends. They are from diverse
origins and have many different hobbies, interests, ideas, beliefs. You may
think that you can learn much from them just by talking or living in the same
area or you may feel that your life will be funnier than the life that you have
just one or two close people around you. While this style of life may be better
for many people, however, personally, I agree with the assertion that having one
or two close friends is beter than to have a large number of casual acquaintances.
To begin with, I think that close friends are more reliable.
In our world, reliability of people have decreased dramatically. Well, it may
not feel this way for some or even many, but from my view, friendships between
people have became more superficial and money oriented. However, this decrease
in iner values can only be compensated with one or two good friends. Because it
is not only easier, but also more proper to trust close friends. According to
my own experience, I have only one close friend whose name is Onur and whenever
i have a problem or a matter to consult, i immediately ask him if he is
available to speak about it. In most cases, i can confide him, since he behaves
the same way i do to me.
In addition to high confidence, I believe that having less
friends provides time saving. Time is nearly above every other valuable things
such as money, love or achievements. It is true that for some, this is not much
of priority, as they either don’t live as hasty as i do. However, for me, time
is very important as it should not be wasted. It is obvious that if I have many
acquaintances, I will not have much free time to spend for my prior needs such
as my studies, hobbies etc. From my own experience, while i was studying for
passing the exam in order to attend my dream school, i only had two or three
close friends so that i could save my free time and concentrate on my tests and
exams.
Finally, alongisde the issues of reliability and importance
of time, I feel that less but close friendships bring future opportunities. In
this time, contacts are very important for both in academic life and professional
life. While having no references can be fine for some, I think for a majority
of people, it is really significant to have distinguishable and valuable
contacts. Since good contacts mean an appropiate job, a higher salary and a more
suitable work place. Thus, ın my view, a person can not acquire good references
from his broad but casual friendships, but from his close friends. Consider,
for example, if two person are intimates and have grew up together an one of
them have found a worthy job, he will definitely refer his close friend to his
boss and they will probably work together because bosses recognize that
collaboration and harmony in companies is the key factor to develop in
competitive job world.
In considering whether having few intimates or having many superficial friendships is more preferable, I have explored the issues the trustablity, time accumulation and future chances. These factors may not be persuasive to all people, but they have lead me to agree with the blanket statement that claims having few close friends is better than to have lots of casual friendships.
Some people prefer to have a large number of casual acquaintences while others prefer to have one or two close friends. Although each of kind of friends has its own advantages, in my opinion, having one or two close friends is better. As far as I am cocerned, I definitely prefer to have one or two close friends. This opinion is based on notions such as helping, strong and stable relationship and less danger.
To start with, close friends are more helpful than many casual acquaintences. When we have some problems in every day life such as problem about working, education , love even money. Close friends could help to solve those problems. They always give advices and helped to relieve the problems. According to my own experience, when I had problem about my work and felt stress, I always talked with my close friends. They would give me the ways to solve problems and made me feel better. For example, we would go to shopping and dinner together. This could help me to relax. Morover, when I get sick or feel not well, my close friend will take care me and take me to the hospital. In contrast, casual friends cannot do like that.
In addition to helping, I believe that the relationship between close friends is longer and more stable than the relationship between acquaintences. We can keep the relatonship between close friends several years may be a until we die. We don't have to meet and talk together everyday but our relationship still be good. From my own life, I have 2 closet friends which I met them when I was in primary school, and we still are friends to this day. On the other hand, relationship with acquaintences is not stable. We could not keep the relationship for long time.
Finally, alongside the issue of helping and stable relationship, I think that many casual acquaintences are quite dangerous. We cannot rely and trust on them because we don't know them as well. We don't know about their past. They may be dangerous for us. For instance, they may steal our money or kill us. For example, I fonud the news about the murder in the newspaper showed that the girl was murdered and stolen her money by her online-friend which they just knew each other for 2 weeks.
To sum up, in considering the issue of whether having a few close friends or many casual friends is better, I have explored notions such as helping, stable relationship and safety. These considerations may not be persuasive for all people, but they lead me personallly to believe that having one or two close friends is better.
Imagine you have lots of friends. They are from diverse origins and have many different hobbies, interests, ideas, beliefs. You may think that you can learn much from them just by talking or living in the same area or you may feel that your life will be funnier than the life that you have just one or two close people around you. While this style of life may be better for many people, however, personally, I agree with the assertion that having one or two close friends is beter than to have a large number of casual acquaintances.
To begin with, I think that close friends are more reliable. In our world, reliability of people have decreased dramatically. Well, it may not feel this way for some or even many, but from my view, friendships between people have became more superficial and money oriented. However, this decrease in iner values can only be compensated with one or two good friends. Because it is not only easier, but also more proper to trust close friends. According to my own experience, I have only one close friend whose name is Onur and whenever i have a problem or a matter to consult, i immediately ask him if he is available to speak about it. In most cases, i can confide him, since he behaves the same way i do to me.
In addition to high confidence, I believe that having less friends provides time saving. Time is nearly above every other valuable things such as money, love or achievements. It is true that for some, this is not much of priority, as they either don’t live as hasty as i do. However, for me, time is very important as it should not be wasted. It is obvious that if I have many acquaintances, I will not have much free time to spend for my prior needs such as my studies, hobbies etc. From my own experience, while i was studying for passing the exam in order to attend my dream school, i only had two or three close friends so that i could save my free time and concentrate on my tests and exams.
Finally, alongisde the issues of reliability and importance of time, I feel that less but close friendships bring future opportunities. In this time, contacts are very important for both in academic life and professional life. While having no references can be fine for some, I think for a majority of people, it is really significant to have distinguishable and valuable contacts. Since good contacts mean an appropiate job, a higher salary and a more suitable work place. Thus, ın my view, a person can not acquire good references from his broad but casual friendships, but from his close friends. Consider, for example, if two person are intimates and have grew up together an one of them have found a worthy job, he will definitely refer his close friend to his boss and they will probably work together because bosses recognize that collaboration and harmony in companies is the key factor to develop in competitive job world.
In considering whether having few intimates or having many superficial friendships is more preferable, I have explored the issues the trustablity, time accumulation and future chances. These factors may not be persuasive to all people, but they have lead me to agree with the blanket statement that claims having few close friends is better than to have lots of casual friendships.
-atomen
Score = 4.5
Excellent essay, and outstanding use of the principles and techniques I recommend in the TOEFL Writing Mentor tutorials (your use of concession and advanced cohesion are particularly good here!). Only hitch are some grammatical and sentence formation problems (be careful not to have 'dangling clauses' without subjects or objects!)
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Some people prefer to have a large number of casual acquaintences while others prefer to have one or two close friends. Although each of kind of friends has its own advantages, in my opinion, having one or two close friends is better. As far as I am cocerned, I definitely prefer to have one or two close friends. This opinion is based on notions such as helping, strong and stable relationship and less danger.
To start with, close friends are more helpful than many casual acquaintences. When we have some problems in every day life such as problem about working, education , love even money. Close friends could help to solve those problems. They always give advices and helped to relieve the problems. According to my own experience, when I had problem about my work and felt stress, I always talked with my close friends. They would give me the ways to solve problems and made me feel better. For example, we would go to shopping and dinner together. This could help me to relax. Morover, when I get sick or feel not well, my close friend will take care me and take me to the hospital. In contrast, casual friends cannot do like that.
In addition to helping, I believe that the relationship between close friends is longer and more stable than the relationship between acquaintences. We can keep the relatonship between close friends several years may be a until we die. We don't have to meet and talk together everyday but our relationship still be good. From my own life, I have 2 closet friends which I met them when I was in primary school, and we still are friends to this day. On the other hand, relationship with acquaintences is not stable. We could not keep the relationship for long time.
Finally, alongside the issue of helping and stable relationship, I think that many casual acquaintences are quite dangerous. We cannot rely and trust on them because we don't know them as well. We don't know about their past. They may be dangerous for us. For instance, they may steal our money or kill us. For example, I fonud the news about the murder in the newspaper showed that the girl was murdered and stolen her money by her online-friend which they just knew each other for 2 weeks.
To sum up, in considering the issue of whether having a few close friends or many casual friends is better, I have explored notions such as helping, stable relationship and safety. These considerations may not be persuasive for all people, but they lead me personallly to believe that having one or two close friends is better.
-macma
Score = 4.0
Great essay, and good use of my TOEFL Writing Mentor principles, but be careful with your sentence formation and vocabulary use, and try to incorporate some concession devices to give your argument a feeling of more balance.
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Large number of occasional relationship friends can provide more diverse and a lot of connections that can help me have a chance to get more benefits in someway. In addition, they can give me better ideas or solutions for solving my problem. However, I personally agree with the idea of having one or two close friends rather than having a large number of casual acquaintences.
To begin with, I can pay more and full attention to less number of close friends. It is true that a lot of people can provide more diverse to me, however, with less number of friends, especially close friend, let me have a chance easily to know and remember important details of my friends. This information such as their birthday, the things they like or unlike can help me get along well with my friends. According to my experience, I have just two close friends. Every their birthday, I will buy a special gift that they like or want to them. In the same way, they will buy my favorite stuffs for me every my birthday as well. That makes me and my friends are very happy and think that there are some people still care and interesting me and them. So, I think that less number of close friends help me be able to remember details and characteristics of my friends that can lead me to get along well with them.
In addition, I think close friends can help me a lot, even though they are less number. Close friends always ready to give me a hand for solving my problems. It is true that a lot of people may provide more options and ideas to solve the problem, however, these ideas will come if and only if people ready to help me. Consider, for example, I lost my book that is used for preparing for my final exam in the day before the exam. I ask for helping from several people in my class, however, just only my close friend ready to go with me to copy his book. We have to wait for three hours for the book’s copy. I appreciate my close friend that he wastes his preparing time for helping me. From this example, I think that I can survive in this world, even though I just have only one close friend in the world.
Finally, I feel that large number of friends lead more confuse to me. Of course, in some cases, a lot of people can make me funnier and more enjoyable, however, most of casual acquaintences have me to be their friends for some benefits. While, I can provide some sources of benefit to them, they still keep me to be their friend. This kind of friend always ask me for some help, so if I had I lot of this kind of friend, I would be confuse by a lot of requesting. From my experience, I used to be smarter guy in my class. I always understood every lesson in every subject that I studied so my friends in my class always ask me for some tutorials or some questions, especially, in the time that the exam was coming. With this situation, I was very confuse and had not time to prepare myself for the exam.
In considering which one is better either having just one or two close friends or having a lot of friends, even though, I do not close with them too much. I have explored issues such as I have a chance to know my close friends better; close friends ready to help me in every situation; and a lot of people give me a lot of problem. These factors lead me to believe that having just one or two close friends would be preferable to have a lot of occasional relationship friends.
Having a friend is one of the most important assets aside from material things. He or she is the most essential and valuable person apart from your family that one could have ever consider in the society from childhood until adulthood. Personally, I agree to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual friends.I have considered these reasons such as keeping trusted and reliable friend; establish intimate friendship and having an acquaintance to her family members.
To begin with, I certainly believe that having a close friend is such an assurance that you will have one of the trusted and reliable friends. By starting a simple acquaintance, then eventually the relationship develop deeper and turns into a solid foundation, it will results to building trust, confidence and even loyalty to your friendship. Consider, for example, I have a close friend when I was in high school. I confide everything to her all my personal problems and even my secrets that even my parents don't know. I have proved that she is trustworthy and a genuine friend. Morever, it's worth to have her because of her qualities as a true friend that makes mei nspired to keep her forever until now that we got married.
In addition to the reason of having a trusted friend, I think you will be able to establish intimate friendship. There are a lot of friendship that fade because their relationship is shallow and they just come and go but if you have a close friend, you are very sure that you can find someone to lean on especially in times of despair and sadness. For example, you have a personal problem that you cannot tell to your parents, the first person will come across to your mind, is your closest friend. This is the advantage of having a close friend because you can think of someone close to you that you can count on.
Finally, if you have close friend, you will have a tendency to become close to his or her family members because they consider you as a part of them. For example, during family gatherings of your best friend, you are always invited and you will get involve then of their regular family affairs. Of course, you will feel that you are welcome by your best friend's family and the same way to your family. In this regard, you will have an extended family and during family affairs and events, your presence is considered of high importance. Even the least expected events like death case, or someone is sick or in the hospital, your close friend and her family is always there.
In considering the issue of having a close friend or having a large number of acquaintances, I personally agree to have a one or two close friends because of the following reasons that I explored such as having a reliable and genuine friend, deep foundation of friendship and getting closer to family members. Whatever friends you may have whether they are few or many, the most important factor to consider is you have chosen the one that is genuine and trustworthy and not the other way around like traitors.
Large number of occasional relationship friends can provide more diverse and a lot of connections that can help me have a chance to get more benefits in someway. In addition, they can give me better ideas or solutions for solving my problem. However, I personally agree with the idea of having one or two close friends rather than having a large number of casual acquaintences.
To begin with, I can pay more and full attention to less number of close friends. It is true that a lot of people can provide more diverse to me, however, with less number of friends, especially close friend, let me have a chance easily to know and remember important details of my friends. This information such as their birthday, the things they like or unlike can help me get along well with my friends. According to my experience, I have just two close friends. Every their birthday, I will buy a special gift that they like or want to them. In the same way, they will buy my favorite stuffs for me every my birthday as well. That makes me and my friends are very happy and think that there are some people still care and interesting me and them. So, I think that less number of close friends help me be able to remember details and characteristics of my friends that can lead me to get along well with them.In addition, I think close friends can help me a lot, even though they are less number. Close friends always ready to give me a hand for solving my problems. It is true that a lot of people may provide more options and ideas to solve the problem, however, these ideas will come if and only if people ready to help me. Consider, for example, I lost my book that is used for preparing for my final exam in the day before the exam. I ask for helping from several people in my class, however, just only my close friend ready to go with me to copy his book. We have to wait for three hours for the book’s copy. I appreciate my close friend that he wastes his preparing time for helping me. From this example, I think that I can survive in this world, even though I just have only one close friend in the world.
Finally, I feel that large number of friends lead more confuse to me. Of course, in some cases, a lot of people can make me funnier and more enjoyable, however, most of casual acquaintences have me to be their friends for some benefits. While, I can provide some sources of benefit to them, they still keep me to be their friend. This kind of friend always ask me for some help, so if I had I lot of this kind of friend, I would be confuse by a lot of requesting. From my experience, I used to be smarter guy in my class. I always understood every lesson in every subject that I studied so my friends in my class always ask me for some tutorials or some questions, especially, in the time that the exam was coming. With this situation, I was very confuse and had not time to prepare myself for the exam.
In considering which one is better either having just one or two close friends or having a lot of friends, even though, I do not close with them too much. I have explored issues such as I have a chance to know my close friends better; close friends ready to help me in every situation; and a lot of people give me a lot of problem. These factors lead me to believe that having just one or two close friends would be preferable to have a lot of occasional relationship friends.
-sasin324
Score = 4.0
Wonderful essay - excellent use of ideas, examples and balance through concession comments. Only problem is consistent grammatical errors and not enough advanced language.
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Having a friend is one of the most important assets aside from material things. He or she is the most essential and valuable person apart from your family that one could have ever consider in the society from childhood until adulthood. Personally, I agree to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual friends.I have considered these reasons such as keeping trusted and reliable friend; establish intimate friendship and having an acquaintance to her family members.
To begin with, I certainly believe that having a close friend is such an assurance that you will have one of the trusted and reliable friends. By starting a simple acquaintance, then eventually the relationship develop deeper and turns into a solid foundation, it will results to building trust, confidence and even loyalty to your friendship. Consider, for example, I have a close friend when I was in high school. I confide everything to her all my personal problems and even my secrets that even my parents don't know. I have proved that she is trustworthy and a genuine friend. Morever, it's worth to have her because of her qualities as a true friend that makes mei nspired to keep her forever until now that we got married.
In addition to the reason of having a trusted friend, I think you will be able to establish intimate friendship. There are a lot of friendship that fade because their relationship is shallow and they just come and go but if you have a close friend, you are very sure that you can find someone to lean on especially in times of despair and sadness. For example, you have a personal problem that you cannot tell to your parents, the first person will come across to your mind, is your closest friend. This is the advantage of having a close friend because you can think of someone close to you that you can count on.
Finally, if you have close friend, you will have a tendency to become close to his or her family members because they consider you as a part of them. For example, during family gatherings of your best friend, you are always invited and you will get involve then of their regular family affairs. Of course, you will feel that you are welcome by your best friend's family and the same way to your family. In this regard, you will have an extended family and during family affairs and events, your presence is considered of high importance. Even the least expected events like death case, or someone is sick or in the hospital, your close friend and her family is always there.
In considering the issue of having a close friend or having a large number of acquaintances, I personally agree to have a one or two close friends because of the following reasons that I explored such as having a reliable and genuine friend, deep foundation of friendship and getting closer to family members. Whatever friends you may have whether they are few or many, the most important factor to consider is you have chosen the one that is genuine and trustworthy and not the other way around like traitors.
-venus
Score = 4.0
Very good essay, certainly well-developed and supported - just problems with language errors and lack of vocabulary/expression depth.
The latest TOEFL iBTv tutorial for writing (available in your private membership page) presents the Zero conditional construction - it would be useful with some of the examples you've presented here!
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Imagin a person who has one friend and the friend is always busy and he does not have time to listen to his friend. When this person has a problem and he call his friend the answer machine replies record the massage after the tone. When he send a massage through email or text him by cell phone, he waits long time for the answer. For sure this person will find another person who try to listen to him or give him time or some effort to solve the problem. Although not all acquaintences are friends but I think I can be friend with them. More friends means more ideas to digest, more help to find, and alot of fun time to spend.
To begin with, the first advantage of acquaintences is more opinion, more thoughts and more experiences for the person. For instance each person has certain interests, hobbies, and thoughts. If I do not know how to cook certain kind of food and my friend Amal has great cooking experience, for sure she will give me great ideas to make special dish for my family at the weekend. My other friend is smart and when she study she knows where to focus and how to catch up with her time, she may help me to get better results in my testes. She is a good researcher, I can use her resources to find more beneficial website for my assignments.
In addition to having more ideas, having more friends means getting more help when you need. To illustrate, from my own experiences, one time my car broken, I took it to the shop, my friend Muna gave her car and offered to give me a ride whenever I want. Another example, one day I had a big invitation and my friend rita helped me by cooking for me two dishes and one desert. My other friend Rana helped me with preparation of the table and other utensiles. What a great help more than you do not feel that you are in predicament or you can not make the invitation at perfect time and way.
Finally, there is a saying which states that friends double and maximize our joys and devide our grieves. That is why more friend means more fun time to spend and more happiness in life. When I want to go out to the theater I call my friends, we spend a great time together.My other friends prefer to go to churches and community center to find more friends, discuss more ideas so I go with her.
To conclude, since I am a social person, and I love also to help people and to learn more issues about life experiences from different people, different culture, different education. I think making more friends means varieties of experiences, more aid and assistance and less stress to cope with our life and endure any change in our conditions or sitiations.
Unfortunatly this essay took me 36 minute to finish
It is
better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual
acquaintences.
Imagine you live alone in a big city, and one dark night
you had a car accident on a street. What are you going to do? Will you think of
only one or two close friend, who you have kept contact for some years or the
ones, who joined your birthday party only once? I used to be in that situation.
Whenever I am in troubles, I like to ask helps from only closed friend, because
I know that they will help me for sure. I firmly believe that having one or two
close friends is better than have a large number of causal accuaintences.
First of all, only tiny amount of friends allows us learning
others’ attitude. We have limit time for making social contact with many
people. Majority people select the best people who share ideas, habits and characteristics.
This learning process takes time, it is very hard for us to spend time with
many people. Most people work, so it would be very hard to get close contact
with them. Friendship need time to build; any unwelcomed words and habits from
the other person are important for good relationship. My closest friend is from
my office. He joins lunch at building cafeteria almost every day. The first
meeting, we shared usual discussion; however, after one year we become really
good friend because we love playing sport, listening to music. We extend our
personal trait and helping each other most of time. I feel like he is my real
brother.
In addition limitation of time in learning others’ habit,
I also think that people have difficulties in accepting human behavior. It is
true that, we can meet and talk with many people but people’s instinct has procedure
to think whether this person will be truly friend or not. I met many people
each day, however, not too many of them are ready to share personal contact. Their
personalities do not match with mine. Based on this fact, I have no intension
to keep contact, except working. One of my business partners, for example, has
worked for ten years in my business network. Because of our lifestyle is
different, for example, he likes smoking everywhere, even in the office, or during
business discussion. This is unaccepted habit because I think that he pays less
respect to people’s health.
Finally, in combination with learning human attitude and
accepting personal trait, I still think that few friends is a way to save
money. Why should we spend money to organize big party for 200-300 people. To invite unknown people to party, more money
is required. Those guests come to party looking for possibility for free drinking,
dancing, or dating with some body. They sometimes broke home decorations. Although
inviting many people to a party is a good reason for a party host, for example,
showing people financial status. However, I feel that it is useless to spending
money for untrue friends. My father, for instance, likes organizing party at
home. When need helps, only few closed friends help him. Last year, when the
financial crisis was widely separate in my country; he is almost bankrupt but
only few friends lend him money.
In considering the issue of having small amount of
friends, I have explored limitation of learning people
attitude, sharing common characteristics and saving budget. This lead me to
believe that few friends is better than casual acquaninteneces. Don’t stop to
know new people; of course we have to open our mind to be friend with many
people as much as possible but we should make critical thinking in our mind about
who is our best friend.
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It is better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual acquaintences.
According to MSNBC news a few weeks ago, most people
change friends every five to seven years. Why? It could be because the change
of environments, or it could be caused by conflict. In our span of life, we
will make and lose friends many times abound.
Human are social beings. We feel that we need to be around other people,
just like some people said “, the more is the merrier.” With current web technology such as Facebook
and Twitter, we can make friends with just anybody from all around the world, however,
personally, I agree with the assertions that having one or two close friends
are better than having a number of casual acquaintances.
To begin with, I am an introvert person. When I am in a public place, I have
reservation and I could not just open up to anybody. Unless somebody speaks to
me first, I prefer to observe and stay in the corner and be comfortable by
myself. While it is true that nowadays lots of ‘how to make new friends’ books
are available on the market, in reality, it is not as easy as it seems. Many
people are shy and cannot just conjure words and make themselves the center of
attention and take the first step to approach somebody else. Although this is a
disadvantage for many, we cannot just change our personality. Just like my
sister who can be someone’s best friend in an hour after she met other people,
I sometimes feel the words are stuck on my throat and just could not get out.
In addition to that, not everybody can fit into our
personality. Have you ever met someone and deep down in your heart you somehow
felt that you have known that person for a long time? You can just talk to
him/her like you know him/her forever. Also, have you tried so hard to bond and
connect with someone, but either that person cannot understand what you are
talking about or you don’t understand that he/she is talking about? I have seen two people with good intention end
up with fighting against each other because each take the other’s meaning in a
negative way. Just because of one small joke, or advice. Someone who is aggressive
does not have the patience to wait for friends who are passive. Likewise, a person who is relaxed does not
like to be rushed into making decisions. It is natural for people to be
attracted to someone who share certain similarities. These similarities can be
shared in hobbies, food types, or personality.
Finally, we can focus our attentions to develop
better and closer relationship with a small group of friends. It is easier to work in a small group rather
than big group. For example, we want to
have dinner with our friends. A wants to eat at Ruby’s Tuesday. B wants to eat
at TGIF, C wants to eat at Chili. It is harder to reach consensus on where to
eat, isn’t it? Although it is important
for any human being to live in society and have as many friends as possible, deep
inside us, we want intimacy. We want to belong. We want to feel special. This can only be
attained with an exclusive and close relationship. Also, if we have a problem,
we usually share it with only the person closest to us. We would not just open
our dirty laundry to just anybody, wouldn’t we? Furthermore, when I received a
nice big surprise, I automatically think of my closest friends, and I do not
even think of my casual acquaintances.
To sum up, based on the human’s needs to belong and the
many type of personality, these lead me to agree that it is better to have one
or two close friends. In fact, I think that you would agree with me in this
issue, wouldn’t you?
Imagin a person who has one friend and the friend is always busy and he does not have time to listen to his friend. When this person has a problem and he call his friend the answer machine replies record the massage after the tone. When he send a massage through email or text him by cell phone, he waits long time for the answer. For sure this person will find another person who try to listen to him or give him time or some effort to solve the problem. Although not all acquaintences are friends but I think I can be friend with them. More friends means more ideas to digest, more help to find, and alot of fun time to spend.
To begin with, the first advantage of acquaintences is more opinion, more thoughts and more experiences for the person. For instance each person has certain interests, hobbies, and thoughts. If I do not know how to cook certain kind of food and my friend Amal has great cooking experience, for sure she will give me great ideas to make special dish for my family at the weekend. My other friend is smart and when she study she knows where to focus and how to catch up with her time, she may help me to get better results in my testes. She is a good researcher, I can use her resources to find more beneficial website for my assignments.
In addition to having more ideas, having more friends means getting more help when you need. To illustrate, from my own experiences, one time my car broken, I took it to the shop, my friend Muna gave her car and offered to give me a ride whenever I want. Another example, one day I had a big invitation and my friend rita helped me by cooking for me two dishes and one desert. My other friend Rana helped me with preparation of the table and other utensiles. What a great help more than you do not feel that you are in predicament or you can not make the invitation at perfect time and way.
Finally, there is a saying which states that friends double and maximize our joys and devide our grieves. That is why more friend means more fun time to spend and more happiness in life. When I want to go out to the theater I call my friends, we spend a great time together.My other friends prefer to go to churches and community center to find more friends, discuss more ideas so I go with her.
To conclude, since I am a social person, and I love also to help people and to learn more issues about life experiences from different people, different culture, different education. I think making more friends means varieties of experiences, more aid and assistance and less stress to cope with our life and endure any change in our conditions or sitiations.
-zenakhalid
Score = 3.5
Unfortunately, the essay is "top heavy" - meaning it starts off very detailed but each paragraph gets progressively shorter and less detailed! This is a clear sign you are just writing from start to finish and not really developing the body of your essay with a clear strategy. Also, your arguments seem to rest purely on the idea of number of friends, and miss the key topical words "close" versus "casual".
:D
It is better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual acquaintences.Imagine you live alone in a big city, and one dark night you had a car accident on a street. What are you going to do? Will you think of only one or two close friend, who you have kept contact for some years or the ones, who joined your birthday party only once? I used to be in that situation. Whenever I am in troubles, I like to ask helps from only closed friend, because I know that they will help me for sure. I firmly believe that having one or two close friends is better than have a large number of causal accuaintences.
First of all, only tiny amount of friends allows us learning others’ attitude. We have limit time for making social contact with many people. Majority people select the best people who share ideas, habits and characteristics. This learning process takes time, it is very hard for us to spend time with many people. Most people work, so it would be very hard to get close contact with them. Friendship need time to build; any unwelcomed words and habits from the other person are important for good relationship. My closest friend is from my office. He joins lunch at building cafeteria almost every day. The first meeting, we shared usual discussion; however, after one year we become really good friend because we love playing sport, listening to music. We extend our personal trait and helping each other most of time. I feel like he is my real brother.In addition limitation of time in learning others’ habit, I also think that people have difficulties in accepting human behavior. It is true that, we can meet and talk with many people but people’s instinct has procedure to think whether this person will be truly friend or not. I met many people each day, however, not too many of them are ready to share personal contact. Their personalities do not match with mine. Based on this fact, I have no intension to keep contact, except working. One of my business partners, for example, has worked for ten years in my business network. Because of our lifestyle is different, for example, he likes smoking everywhere, even in the office, or during business discussion. This is unaccepted habit because I think that he pays less respect to people’s health.
Finally, in combination with learning human attitude and accepting personal trait, I still think that few friends is a way to save money. Why should we spend money to organize big party for 200-300 people. To invite unknown people to party, more money is required. Those guests come to party looking for possibility for free drinking, dancing, or dating with some body. They sometimes broke home decorations. Although inviting many people to a party is a good reason for a party host, for example, showing people financial status. However, I feel that it is useless to spending money for untrue friends. My father, for instance, likes organizing party at home. When need helps, only few closed friends help him. Last year, when the financial crisis was widely separate in my country; he is almost bankrupt but only few friends lend him money.
In considering the issue of having small amount of friends, I have explored limitation of learning people attitude, sharing common characteristics and saving budget. This lead me to believe that few friends is better than casual acquaninteneces. Don’t stop to know new people; of course we have to open our mind to be friend with many people as much as possible but we should make critical thinking in our mind about who is our best friend.
-norkhame
Score = 4.0
You've developed and supported your arguments really well - it is just your language use/accuracy that is letting you down.
:D
It is better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casual acquaintences.
According to MSNBC news a few weeks ago, most people change friends every five to seven years. Why? It could be because the change of environments, or it could be caused by conflict. In our span of life, we will make and lose friends many times abound. Human are social beings. We feel that we need to be around other people, just like some people said “, the more is the merrier.” With current web technology such as Facebook and Twitter, we can make friends with just anybody from all around the world, however, personally, I agree with the assertions that having one or two close friends are better than having a number of casual acquaintances.
To begin with, I am an introvert person. When I am in a public place, I have reservation and I could not just open up to anybody. Unless somebody speaks to me first, I prefer to observe and stay in the corner and be comfortable by myself. While it is true that nowadays lots of ‘how to make new friends’ books are available on the market, in reality, it is not as easy as it seems. Many people are shy and cannot just conjure words and make themselves the center of attention and take the first step to approach somebody else. Although this is a disadvantage for many, we cannot just change our personality. Just like my sister who can be someone’s best friend in an hour after she met other people, I sometimes feel the words are stuck on my throat and just could not get out.
In addition to that, not everybody can fit into our personality. Have you ever met someone and deep down in your heart you somehow felt that you have known that person for a long time? You can just talk to him/her like you know him/her forever. Also, have you tried so hard to bond and connect with someone, but either that person cannot understand what you are talking about or you don’t understand that he/she is talking about? I have seen two people with good intention end up with fighting against each other because each take the other’s meaning in a negative way. Just because of one small joke, or advice. Someone who is aggressive does not have the patience to wait for friends who are passive. Likewise, a person who is relaxed does not like to be rushed into making decisions. It is natural for people to be attracted to someone who share certain similarities. These similarities can be shared in hobbies, food types, or personality.
Finally, we can focus our attentions to develop better and closer relationship with a small group of friends. It is easier to work in a small group rather than big group. For example, we want to have dinner with our friends. A wants to eat at Ruby’s Tuesday. B wants to eat at TGIF, C wants to eat at Chili. It is harder to reach consensus on where to eat, isn’t it? Although it is important for any human being to live in society and have as many friends as possible, deep inside us, we want intimacy. We want to belong. We want to feel special. This can only be attained with an exclusive and close relationship. Also, if we have a problem, we usually share it with only the person closest to us. We would not just open our dirty laundry to just anybody, wouldn’t we? Furthermore, when I received a nice big surprise, I automatically think of my closest friends, and I do not even think of my casual acquaintances.
To sum up, based on the human’s needs to belong and the many type of personality, these lead me to agree that it is better to have one or two close friends. In fact, I think that you would agree with me in this issue, wouldn’t you?
-inasaja
Score = 4.5
This is very well written and expressed. My only concern was the final body paragraph, which appeared to tackle too many different ideas simultaneously under the general idea of "relationship"- but otherwise, an excellent response to the topic!
:D
Some people like to make more friends because they think they will have more fun and entertainment with them. While other people are more likely to make only few friends because they feel relationship would be great with few friends. As far as I concerned, I am more likely to make only few closed freinds instead of large number of friends. I will expalin all my major reasons as below.
Firstly, my one of the primary reason is you can imagine that if you have large number of friends but if you do not have any closed one. In this time, if you get any problem no one will be with you if you do not have closed one. Large numbers of friends could not be with you all the time to caring you. One realtion could be deep relationship with you. More friends more complicated. In addition, I have one experienced when I was in high school, that time I had lots of friends nearby me. I thought all had with me cared me. But, everybody had same wishes to be with them all the time. I did not have that much time to spend with them. They made be distracted all the time. I was really mad even I was lots of friends. They could be even dangerous in sometime.
Secondly, I like to make few closed one friends who is willing to help me, care me, and love me. I think in my view, by making large numbers of friends means doing mistakes by your self. You know there is no guarantee you would have good relationship with them all the time. If you did any mistakes how many friends could understand you? and with how many friends to you could explain?. It is really hard to make satisfied to all. Moreover, I believe that, chosable few friends are much more valuable than large friends when you really need. Closed one is always helpful for you.
Finally, Friends means closed who can gives you supports, whenever you need. Friends is that who is really trust you and share you. Sharing is caring, it is possible only by closed one. Now, I have only 2,3 friends but they are enough for me because they are very closed with me and like to help me. Last time I got problem in my computer and I called my one of the nearest friend. Afterall, she came at my home solved my problem. She does encaurage all the time for my study too. She wishes my happiness. She likes to make me happy. She is available whenever I need. You know you can give the time only to few friends, you can share your feeling only to closed one. Ultimately, they could do same as you do.
In sum up, having lots friends are some time would have much fun when you are going to do gathering and any programs. However, having few closed one is much more important in your daily life than large friends. I have explained all reasons of the factors. Those factors lead to believe me having one or two closed one is much more better than large acquaintences.
