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Poll: Independent writing task: :It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan?"

Independent writing task: :It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built
in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan?"

about 430 words. (should I shorten it until I reach 400 words?)

Malls are a recent phenomena. Since shopping became a way of spending the leisure time, they started to be built all over the world. They are actually a good way to organize massive shopping, since they enclose all the places in a single location, and isolate them from the public scene. Even though I never frequent them because I dislike spending my time buying things, I think that a mall could be a good incorporation for the area where I reside.
So, do I support the construction of the new shopping mall? I definitely do. Personally, I think that a project of this magnitude will benefit the local community by boosting its economy and empowering the neighborhood.

The first reason why I support the plan is that it will enhance the local economy. Although it may turn out to be a severe competition for some of the independent shoppes, in a free market economy competition is always welcome. With the incorporation of this big mall, the quality of the area will undoubtedly increase. For instance, the restaurants will attract people with a higher purchasing power, and the stores will increase their sales. Furthermore, the value of the land will surely increment. Since most of the neighbors own the properties where they live, I am certain that whenever they choose to move out they will make a big profit out of their houses and apartments.

In addition, I also support the project because it will radically empower the neighborhood. Such a big investment as a shopping center will require the melioration of the surrounding infrastructure. For example, the cobble of the streets will be almost certainly replaced by smooth pavement. So even if the street will be much more crowded, the traffic will generate less noise. Moreover, considering that the police always protect private property, the neighborhood will be a much safer place to hang out at night. In this way, crime will assuredly decrease, and the kids will be able to go out without any companion.

To conclude, I have accounted for the reasons why I not only approve but also support the construction of the shopping mall in my neighborhood. I am confident that it will increase our living standard by improving our economy. Likewise, given that it will amend the infrastructure of the area, it shall turn the zone into a much nicer place to live. We should keep in mind that a few local shops may go on bankruptcy if they do not fix their settings, so we must consequently inform them about our preferences, so they can improve their businesses.

Poll: Score it!

Hi there. Could you all rate and submit your corrections? My main problem, I think, is that it's pretty long. So I have no time left for writing a nice introduction. I counted 491 word. Would it be enough with 400? It cannot be hard to shorten.
Also, do you think that it's preferable to make 3 body paragraphs rather than 2, as I did?

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big
city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to
develop your essay.

The issue at hand is whether it is better to grow up in the countryside rather than in a big city. Even if the country offers the safest environment, people from the city have always the chance to discover themselves better, since they have wider opportunities. So, would it be preferable for a kid to grow up in the countryside instead than in a metropolis? I cannot but strongly disagree. Personally, I believe that it is better for children to be raised in a urban setting, given that the big city offers them a broader range of activities and the possibility to be constantly interacting with people.

The first reason why I disagree with the statement is because of the variety of activities that are available in a city. Whereas the countryside is a rather limited place when it comes to amusement, a big city turns out to be the total opposite. For instance, you will rarely find a hockey, baseball or soccer field anywhere but in a big city. Cities like New York have plenty of them, and some of the recreation places are even public and costless. Although the countryside offers activities such as horseback riding and fishing, these are usually not of the kids' preference. Furthermore, when it comes to find a school where to send the children, there are many more options if you are settled in a city. Not only a bigger number of them, but also different educational approaches. From art schools to literature-oriented ones, and from the the regular public school to the expensive private institute.

In addition, a urban setting lets you interact with other people at every time. Since children are regularly excited and looking for fun, I think that the isolation of the country might make them bored. Oppositely, if they grow up in the city, there are many places where they can meet new friends to hang out every afternoon. For example, my homeland, Buenos Aires, has a lot of public parks where the neighbors' children play together. Also, even if the children are very little, they can be sent to the kindergarten or a private playground. Moreover, it is not only that they have the chance to be surrounded by people all the time, it is also that in the cities the people is more variated. Every metropolis has an heterogeneous population, unlike the country.

To conclude, we have accounted for the reasons why I disagree with the statement above. While the countryside may provide a safer environment, the city will prepare them better for the world, because they will have the chance to choose from virtually every kind of activity, and, likewise, they will never be alone or isolated from others. We should keep in mind that cities are still unsafe, because of the cars and everyday crime, so if we work towards the melioration of these predicaments, children will be able to grow up safer and more confident.

Poll: Score it!

Hi there. Could you all rate and submit your corrections? My main problem, I think, is that it's pretty long. So I have no time left for writing a nice introduction. I counted 491 word. Would it be enough with 400? It cannot be hard to shorten.
Also, do you think that it's preferable to make 3 body paragraphs rather than 2, as I did?

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big
city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to
develop your essay.

The issue at hand is whether it is better to grow up in the countryside rather than in a big city. Even if the country offers the safest environment, people from the city have always the chance to discover themselves better, since they have wider opportunities. So, would it be preferable for a kid to grow up in the countryside instead than in a metropolis? I cannot but strongly disagree. Personally, I believe that it is better for children to be raised in a urban setting, given that the big city offers them a broader range of activities and the possibility to be constantly interacting with people.

The first reason why I disagree with the statement is because of the variety of activities that are available in a city. Whereas the countryside is a rather limited place when it comes to amusement, a big city turns out to be the total opposite. For instance, you will rarely find a hockey, baseball or soccer field anywhere but in a big city. Cities like New York have plenty of them, and some of the recreation places are even public and costless. Although the countryside offers activities such as horseback riding and fishing, these are usually not of the kids' preference. Furthermore, when it comes to find a school where to send the children, there are many more options if you are settled in a city. Not only a bigger number of them, but also different educational approaches. From art schools to literature-oriented ones, and from the the regular public school to the expensive private institute.

In addition, a urban setting lets you interact with other people at every time. Since children are regularly excited and looking for fun, I think that the isolation of the country might make them bored. Oppositely, if they grow up in the city, there are many places where they can meet new friends to hang out every afternoon. For example, my homeland, Buenos Aires, has a lot of public parks where the neighbors' children play together. Also, even if the children are very little, they can be sent to the kindergarten or a private playground. Moreover, it is not only that they have the chance to be surrounded by people all the time, it is also that in the cities the people is more variated. Every metropolis has an heterogeneous population, unlike the country.

To conclude, we have accounted for the reasons why I disagree with the statement above. While the countryside may provide a safer environment, the city will prepare them better for the world, because they will have the chance to choose from virtually every kind of activity, and, likewise, they will never be alone or isolated from others. We should keep in mind that cities are still unsafe, because of the cars and everyday crime, so if we work towards the melioration of these predicaments, children will be able to grow up safer and more confident.

Looking for study partners in NYC

Hi there. I'm looking forward to taking the TOEFL exam. My appointment is on the 25th of July, in Manhattan. I'm currently living in Brooklyn (arrived to the US half a year ago), and I'm desperately seeking for a study group, or at least for a peer with whom to spend long studying journeys.

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